Moment in Time Narrative

Learner: Aditi, Maanvi, Annia, Aryan and Karis       Learning Coach: Mr Hattie          Date: 24 March 2016

Learning Area: Learning Habitat 1 - Literacy

Learning Observed

In Writing we have been looking at Moments in Time. This is a very interesting writing style as the learners have to pick a specific moment in an event that they will write about. It is quite hard to stick to a single moment, rather than recounting the event. The Aditi, Maanvi, Annia, Aryan and Karis need to focus more on the details and sense. We have been looking at a time where we were scared. Looking at a time when we were scared allows the learners to set a mood throughout their writing. The workshops that we have been doing to improve our Capabilities have been based on using writing to paint a picture in the reader's head and paragraphing to organise our ideas. Annia has been really trying to apply the idea of paragraphing to make sure her writing is organised and has flow. Aditi, Maanvi, Aryan and Karis have really been trying to use descriptive language which allows the reader to have the picture in their heads. They have been using similes and different senses to improve the event. The learners have been focusing on this in their writing and it has made them more interesting and detailed.

Evidence of learning

Next Learning Steps

Aditi, Maanvi, Annia, Aryan and Karis’s next learning steps are: Using feedback to edit and improve their writing. Seeking feedback from peers and Learning Coach.