Persuasive Writing

Learner: Karis                                             Date: 21st  September, 2016 Learning Coach: Margaret Patrick            Narrative Assessment

Learning Area: Writing a recount  -Literacy

Learning Observed

Karis was writing (using  language symbols and text) to persuade others that “ Jump Jam should not happen at OrmPS” for her Week 9 assessment.  She completed her planning sheet and chose to use bullet points  and lists to record her ideas.  She recorded more than ten  possible ideas.  Karis demonstrated her capability of writing a persuasive text style as she opened with her statement substantiating it with several ideas. Karis  then developed her ideas making connections with additional supporting information. She introduced several negative factors that made her believe that Jump Jam was not beneficial for OrmPS learners.  She completed four pages espousing her very definite disagreements and finished with that she thought it was unfair. Almost all high frequency words were all spelt correctly. Her writing was presented in four long sections. There was evidence of effective self correcting/editing including; adding pronouns, spelling and removing unnecessary words, reshaping phrases and full stops (sometimes incorrectly).

Evidence of learning

Next Learning Steps

Karis needs to Use paragraphs when introducing a new topic/idea in her writing. Include editing for “sentences endings” using full stops appropriately and not using before conjunctions. Add interesting multiple adjectives to keep her readers interested. Keep her handwriting “in check”  to support her audience’s ease of reading her story. Develop her ideas fuller and ensure they are linked not repeated.